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How would you<[you] (pronoun--second person) <Eliminate second person (you, your, etc.) in academic documents, and avoid addressing the reader directly. Use [one] or [one's] See APA p. 37 and § 2.08. feel [feel] only use for an emotional or sensory state if you<[you] (pronoun--second person) < see previous comment on this*Last reminder--read the rest of the document carefully to locate other similar errors* were required<<For passive voice, such as this, and when to use it--see APA, §2.06 and The Gregg Reference Manual, ¶¶ 1036-1037 to serve in the military, without your consent? <in academic writing, eliminate rhetorical questions that require no answer or that you will be answering--either delete the question or rephrase to create a statement< See suggested solutions--The Gregg Reference Manual, ¶ 110b* Would you be angry, disappointed, or even worried that your lifelong dreams would not play themselves out? Required military service should be a choice not a rule to be constrained<this is passive voice--see previous comment by. America has had a volunteer military since 1973. Fewer than 160,000 of 1.3 million are on active duty and 1.1 million in the reserves are in Iraq. This goes to show that our<[our--do not include the reader or claim untitled ownership] (pronoun--possessive) <Replace the pronoun with an article (a, an, or the) or an indefinite pronoun (one's) to focus the writing on the topic. See APA p. 37 and § 2.08. country does not need a draft, because there is Avoid beginning sentences or clauses with expletive constructions<It/There + is/are/was/were> (or any of their variations, such as there comes or there may be) when you can find more specific nouns and pronouns that create more direct and accurate wording. no lack of soldiers. If our country is attacked<this is passive voice--see previous comment, the people will voluntarily rise to defend themselves.
Life in the military proves to be dangerous, and a volunteer handles it best. Volunteers have felt [felt] only use for an emotional or sensory state the call of duty [call of duty] rewrite with job or find another academic word/phrase<for academic writing--avoid using slang, jargon, clichés, colloquialisms, euphemisms, trite expressions, and wordiness--see APA §§ 2.03-2.04 and regard their country and fellow citizens so highly, that<< [that preceded by punctuation] if the punctuation offsets an interruption (nonessential information)--replace [that] with [which]; otherwise, use either [that] or a comma if there is a natural break here, but not both--see Gregg ¶172b they’re [they're]--avoid all (e.g., don't=do not) contractions in formal writing, except within direct quotes--do not confuse with their or there even willing to risk their own lives for them. On the flip side<<flipside (rewrite with opposing or another academic word/phrase)--combine these words, drafted soldiers who are forced into duty prove to be less effective. They [They<<Avoid vague pronoun references that cause the reader/grader to backtrack for understanding--add the actual subject for clarity<] would rather not be there in<<(there in) can be confusing--missing punctuation? (there, in) or (therein) [into that thing/place]--combine these words the first place! Our country does not a draft for volunteers being less effective. Veterans with combat experience would agree that the worst thing you<< [thing(s)] followed by the pronoun [you] may need an intervening [that] if misreading is possible [thing(s) that you] could have is someone that << [someone that/which]--use who or whom for human beings--use that or which for animals and for things (company, group, etc.) you need to be a professional and is not. The security and safety of everyone else is highly critical, especially when you’re [you're] leave the reader out of the paper and avoid all (e.g., don't=do not) contractions in formal writing, except within direct quotes dependant <<[dependant] is a British spelling--not wrong, but be sure to cite source (if used)--be consistent in use on the person working next to you. The professional soldier should be there by choice and without reservations. This may not always be true but it is much more likely.
Currently, the support for domestic war is dropping and military support is remaining high. The only reason for a draft would be to undermine the morale of military forces fighting the war. For example: American support for involvement in Vietnam was undermined by soldiers who came home to oppose the war and draftees who refused to go there. The opponents of involvement in Iraq want to create a similar situation, which is why there is---see first comment on expletive construction usage support for a draft among the very people who don’t [don't] avoid all (e.g., don't=do not) contractions in formal writing, except within direct quotes support the war. Draft