HELP WITH ENGLISH PLEASE!! 10 POINT SOOON?
I must write history with those elements: - a warrior - a wood - some criminals -a mystery - an unresolved crime Please tell me my english mistakes: im not english!!! In 636 a.C.there was a king who had got a lucky sword. Infact it was made by the most resistent material of that time. He always win all the battles he fight by his sword. So, one day the enemies broke the sword to three eguals pieces.When he started to loose battles and his best warrior has been killed he decided to put a sword’s piece in warrior’s tomb and the others sword’s pieces,always according the legend,were around the world.Those pieces were equals to lots of money and represented an important archeologian (REPERTO) who belonged to a king. In 1973 a group of archeologists, Lara Bunker, Peter Hockness and Jake Dickson, went in the wood where according to the legend it was a warrior’s tomb, to found the famous sword’s piece. But after a hour, Lara realized she was alone and she went to find the men. She found them, but deads. They were been killed by two knifes that they still had in theirs abdomens. Near them, she saw they started to dig befone the tragedy, so she continued and finally founds the tomb with the sword’s piece inside. She was very happy but now she needed to understand what was happened to Peter and Jake.She tought someone else, who knews the legend, could have killed them to take all the money for himself.While she was walking for the wood she saw a person, and then asked him if he has seen somethings strange there. The man answers to have listened one person who screamed to someone else, maybe they were quarrel...add the man. Then Lara remember what Peter was saying to Jake : “We’ll be rich” but she thought he were talking about the good earnings they’d have if they would do a good job. She rans to warrior’s tomb and saw that bodies men were too near to themself and also realized that it hadnt got any sense if someone else killed them and he didnt bring with him the treasure he killed them for. She understanded that Peter and Jake had a plane to steal the sword’s piece, but Peter didnt want to divide the fortune anymore and Jake stabbed him but he also has been killed by Peter dying for revenge. Now she could cme back home and tell all the true about the mistery. please i need more details to correct it i just want to see you writing a texte in italian!!!!!!!!!!!!! thank rebecca..i guess that the10 pnt are yours!! anyway this is a fantasy story....it isnt real!!!!!!!!!
Asked By: Queen B - 4/2/2009
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Answered By: Rebecca S - 4/2/2009
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636 A.D. thats all your getting from me there are mistakes in every line but if English is not your first language /a good effort
Answered By: jokerman131 - 4/2/2009
You need to use a spell and grammer check in your word processor. There are too many mistakes to type out the whole thing for you. The first mistake is that a.C should be A.D.
Answered By: Autumn & Jayden's Mommy!! - 4/2/2009
IM AS CONFUSED AS YOU ARE !!!! LOL :p
Answered By: Jess - 4/2/2009
In 636 a.C. There was a king who had got a lucky sword. In fact it was made by the most resistant material of that time. He always wins all the battles he fights by his sword. So, one day the enemies broke the sword to three equal pieces. When he started to lose battles and his best warrior has been killed he decided... More
Answered By: Jayneexxx - 4/2/2009
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