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My name is -------, I am an Junior -------student at Bridgewater State College. I have just received a letter from the Financial Aid Office stating that I am not making satisfactory academic progress, meaning that I am not eligible for any financial aid during the 2009-2010 year. I understand your standards for awarding financial help to students as you want to help people that will succeed. For this reason, I would like to explain my self and the reason why you see a collapse in my grades during the spring semester of 2007. First I would like to let you know who I am and why I believe that you should given me the chance to further my education. I came to this country 7 years ago to stay with my daughter’s father’s step mother. This woman rapidly became very abusive towards my daughter an infant at the time. I did not know anyone else in this country. I could not speak English, preventing me from finding a place to stay. My doctor forced me to go to a teen shelter in Brockton to prevent her from hurting my newborn baby. While living in the shelter I went to ----- High school. I studied hard trying to learn English and was told I was required to pass the MCAS to graduate. The class of 2003 was the first class in Massachusetts to be required to pass the MCAS as a graduation requirement. I worked really hard caring for my daughter, trying to learn a new language and studying for the MCAS. I struggled, but I overcame that barrier. After graduating from -------- High School in 2003 still living in a shelter I was told that I was not eligible for any financial help or loans because I did not have a green card in my hands. I started working two jobs that summer and caring for my daughter still a baby with chronic asthma. I saved everything I could and in the fall of 2003 I paid my way in to --------Community College. I was still working two jobs and caring for my baby while I took as many classes as possible at --------community college. My life was not easy, I could barely sleep or rest and I was still able to pass my classes. My daughter gave me the strength necessary to keep me going. In the fall of 2006 I transferred to ------- State College still paying for classes myself. I did ok in the first semester but I was already exhausted working and studying non-stop since 2003 with no time to rest my health declined. This was the beginning of the worse to come. At the end of the fall I started a new relationship, my first relationship since I left my daughter’s father in 2000. He was extremely jealous and quickly became abusive. Having one more pressure in my life made it impossible for me to continue my education. I tried really hard that spring. I was working really hard, trying to manage an abusive relationship and caring for my daughter with no family or friends’ support. I first had to drop the Research Methods political Science class and if you look at the schedule for that class I was taking it during my lunch break Monday, Wednesday and Fridays. I could not do it anymore. I continued to take the ------: Constitutional Convention class which was on my lunch break on Tuesdays and Thursdays. I have worked out a deal with my boss so I could still take some classes and work enough to pay all my expenses. Although I was going through hell I pushed my self to complete it. I was almost there when on the day of the final I was physically abused. I felt physically and mentally destroyed. I did not go to the hospital or the police because I was ashamed of myself. I could not think of anything else other than finding a safe place. I never imagined that this would have came back to hunt me after years. I was so humiliated, never envisioned that I would have to share this with anyone, but this is the only reason why I got an F in that class. You can probably verify from Professor --------that the reason why I received an F is because I never went to complete the final. Considering what happened to me, it took me some time to recover. I could not go back to school after that night mare. Subsequent to that horrible relationship, I started dating my husband a wonderful single father that was going to school at ------. We bought a house together in February of last year and in August we went to Brazil to get married where my family could be part of the most important day of my life which used any savings we had. Today I have a house with a mortgage, two children with childcare expenses, my husband’s school loans and credit cards. I am a program coordinator for a program called ----------. I work to ---------in Brockton. I have a nice job, but I still want to finish my education. With our finances I can’t pay for school without getting loans and that is why for the first time in my life I have applied for financial Aid. I feel so close to the finish line. I know you do not have to help me, I know I am not a genius with all (A)s but I am asking you to give me another chance to fulfill my dream. The reaso

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Hello. I would like to help you. I put your question into my word processor program (on my computer.) I ran a grammar and spell check. I corrected your mistakes... More
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