Can someone correct my cover letter please?

To whom It my concern: In response to your advertisement for Computer Information Technologist student recruitement, I would like to submit my resume for your attention in application for this position. I believe my training, experience, communication skills, customer service,dependibility ,team work and proven ability as a technical support specialist will allow me to significantly contribute to your company's IT division. In reviewing the attached resume, you will note that I have acquired valuable experience in all facets of troubleshooting, installations, and maintenance for various desktop operations, hardware, software and networks. I feel that I can bring my expertise and value to your company and through implementation of my technical, logical and analytical skills, make your company increasingly more competitive. I would be most grateful if you would consider me for a job opportunity within your valued agency. I’m very eager to become part of your winning team, In order to acquire the background necessary for a future career in Information Technology. Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon. I can be reached at:xxxxxxxx-xxxxxx Sincerely, since is governement agency i'm applying to, would like to change the following to something else : is a leader in a crowded and competitive industry.

Asked By: Samuel D - 1/29/2010
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Too wordy. I stopped reading after the first paragraph... More
Answered By: cuteynfatal - 1/29/2010
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Too many ( I ) s. State something nice about the company and keep it short. Good luck
Answered By: Sister Antonia - 2/2/2010
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